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You have the start of a very strong story. Your opening leaves the reader very curious as to where it's going to go, and you flash back to building a character with whom we grow very fond. We want to learn more about him to understand why he feels the need to turn to drugs and "snaps." I proofed the entire story, but when I tried to copy it in my answer, it was too long, so I'm going to email it to you via your profile page. I've included one suggestion about a transition near the beginning. The suggestion is in [brackets]. The best of luck to you.